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TJ's Winning Story

tjmteb1 – (wc 1500)

Raffael sat on top of Aegis and guided him through the dark forest. Lemma  and Heroff, the two Wolf Riders he chose to accompany him, followed far  behind and to either side. He stopped his mount and pulled out a crinkled  parchment. If he read the poorly scrawled map correctly, the third possible  location for the hobgoblin camp should be over the next ridge.

The first two sites had showed signs of recent activity: over-turned fire  pits, footprints, bits of litter scattered about. The second even had a  deserted tent. A quick search had revealed it had been cleared out, but it  served as proof the monsters had been there.

An orange glow flickered momentarily through the trees. Raffael stood in  his stirrups and squinted through the shadows. His night vision made the  forest seem like dusk, but it didn’t reveal the source of the light. His  whiskered nose twitched. A hint of burned cedar hung in the air.

He glanced over each shoulder and chattered.

Moments later, Heroff rode up from the right. He pulled his black wolf next  to Raffael’s blue-gray one. Lemma joined them from the left riding his own  tan wolf.

“A fire burns ahead.” Raffael pointed toward the ridge where he saw the  light. “Heroff and I will creep forward and get eyes on it.”

He studied the woods around him. The ridge fell at a gentle angle from the  south down into a valley to the north. “Lemma, I want you to position  yourself on the high ground over there. You’ll be my eyes and ears if  anything tries to come behind us.”

Heroff shifted in his saddle. He was the youngest of the group and had been  a member of the riders for only three years. Raffael chose him because he  was deadly with the sword. Lemma, on the other hand, had been a rider for  nearly as long as Raffael and there wasn’t a Forest Kin alive who could  match his skill with the crossbow.

“Heroff, follow me, but stay off to my right.”

“Yes, Sir.”

“We all set?” Raffael looked at the two. They each nodded. “Good, let’s  go.”

Lemma turned his wolf uphill and disappeared into the woods.

Raffael dismounted with his sword, then gave Aegis a paw signal to remain.  Heroff followed his lead.

They walked toward the crest of the ridge. As they neared the top, Raffael  dropped to all fours and crawled the remaining distance. The smoke grew  stronger as they climbed.

At the crest, the captain stopped and surveyed the scene. His eyebrows drew  in as the odd sight registered. Below them and about fifty paces was a  small lone campfire. It illuminated the center of a narrow clearing.  Raffael searched the woods, but saw no other signs of hobgoblin presence:  no tents, no litter; nothing disturbed the ground other than the little  fire.

Raffael looked to the younger Rider. He held a paw up and shook his head.

He rose slowly and started down the hill. His peripheral vision confirmed  Heroff followed. His head swiveled left and right. He couldn’t understand  why this fire was here, but nothing else. They took two steps into the  clearing when a short chatter came from uphill. Raffael halted and twirled  a half circle.

Deep roars surrounded them. Hobgoblins appeared from all sides. They  brandished maces and crossbows and were armored lightly just as the one he  had encountered a few days prior. These, however, were covered in dirt and  leaves masking their scent. The monsters surrounded them.

Heroff drew close to Raffael and held his sword in front of him. “What now?

The hobgoblins closed in tighter, but did not attack. A tall man dressed in  fine green leather and armed with a serrated long sword, pushed his way  past the hobgoblins and entered the circle. “Drop your weapons!”

Heroff looked to Raffael; his eyes were dark.

Raffael saw he wanted to fight, but now wasn’t the time. He bent slowly  over and laid his short sword on the ground. “What’s the meaning of this?  Why have you come to our woods?”

“I’ll be the one asking the questions here.” He took a step forward, kicked  Raffael’s sword away and curled his upper lip at Heroff. “Now you!”

Raffael gave him a nod and the Forest Kin did as ordered.

The man brushed Heroff's sword to the side and stepped back. “Now call to  the one you have hidden. Tell him to approach unarmed.”

Raffael raised his head and chattered to Lemma. The signal was returned.  “He will be here momentarily. Now, why have you captured us?”

“You will tell me how best to breach your puny village’s walls.”

“Never!”

The leader pointed his sword at Raffael’s chest. “You will tell me, or you  will die.”

A long low howl echoed from the valley, followed by another higher pitched  one. The hobgoblins turned toward the sound.

One monster fell forward, landing on his face next to Raffael. An arrow  stuck in the back of his head.

“Now!” Raffael sprang and rolled in the grass toward his weapon. He grabbed  his sword and allowed his momentum to bring him back to his feet. He swung  at the nearest hobgoblin. Blood spewed from the creature’s stomach.

He looked back toward Heroff. His sword was a blurr. He sidestepped and  lunged, then sidestepped again. The two monsters in front of him swung  their weapons, but only found air where the Forest Kin had once stood.

Raffael spun, cleaving his way through another hobgoblin. He reversed  direction and found himself facing the human.

Two creatures behind the man fell; Aegis stood over them and bit at their  faces.

The leader swung his weapon at Raffael’s head. He ducked and swiveled his  hips. A breeze ruffled his fur as the sword passed overhead. As he turned,  he struck out at the man’s leg. As soon as the weapon hit, he reversed  again and attacked the other.

The human screamed. He dropped to the ground on his knees and attacked  again.

Raffael parried. His arms vibrated from the impact. He kicked the human’s  chin as hard as he could.

The man’s head flew back. Raffael thrust his sword and impaled the man at  the base of his throat. A sickening gargle escaped his mouth as he fought  for breath.

Raffael pulled back on his sword and kicked the man to the ground. He  searched the clearing. Aegis and the black wolf both hovered over fallen  hobgoblins. Nothing else stood. A dozen monsters with sword wounds or  arrows protruding from them, dotted the clearing.

“Heroff, gather on me.” Rafael turned searching the woods. The young Forest  Kin wasn’t in sight. “Heroff!”

A groan called from across the clearing. Raffael ran toward the sound. A  furry blood-soaked arm reached out from underneath a dead hobgoblin with  bite marks on the back of its neck. He rolled the monster aside.

Heroff lay on the ground, eyes closed. The fur on the side of his head was  gone, scraped away by a mace blow. Blood flowed profusely from the wound.

Raffael’s heart threatened to beat from his chest. He dropped to his knees  and placed his ear against his companion. The hollow flow of air was quick  and short. He heard Heroff’s heart pound out two beats then stop. Air  hissed from Heroff’s mouth.

“No!” He grabbed the Forest Kin’s shoulders and shook him. “Wake up!”  Clawed hands grabbed him from behind. He turned and swung his fists.

Lemma blocked the blows. “Raffael. Let him go. He’s gone.”

“No!” Tears soaked the fur around his eyes.

“Raffael, we have to get going! We don’t know if there’s any more out  here.” Lemma’s head turned left and right.

Raffael wiped his eyes then stood. “You're right. Bring Heroff’s mount. We  can’t leave him.”

Lemma secured Heroff’s body to the black wolf as Raffael searched the dead  human leader. In one of his pockets, he found a rolled up scroll. He  brought it to the dying fire and unrolled it.

The scroll detailed a plan to take over Jargon Woods using the hobgoblins  as their muscle. Afterward, the man, named Darrius Radtke, would claim the  area for himself, then wait the arrival of his human troupe of thieves,  bandits and assassins. The plan’s goal was to use the area for his  headquarters and resupply point for illegal activities.

Raffael rolled the document. He would need to report this to the Council.  Although the leader is dead, the others may not be far behind.

He walked over to Lemma and patted him on the back. “Thanks back there.”

Lemma nodded. “He was a good Kin and would have made a great Rider one  day.” He embraced Raffael in a one-armed hug. After a moment he stepped  back. “You ready?”

“I think so.” Raffael turned his head and whistled.

From across the clearing, Aegis ran to Raffael’s side. The captain hopped  onto his saddle and pulled the reins. “Let’s go home, Boy.

Interview With TJ

Interview With our Winner: TJ (tjmteb1)

by jcaska


1. How did you come up with the idea for your story?

After lesson 5, I had a pretty good idea what I was going to write.  I ended that lesson with Raffael receiving a mission.  It was just a matter of troubleshooting the idea until it panned out.

2. How long did it take you to write it?

The first draft took about 45 minutes to write, but editing took about 3 hours.

3. What was the writing process involved in creating this piece?

I go through a troubleshooting phase, where I work out all the details, then write the story from start to finish.  After it’s written, I read through it multiple times for editing.

4. Are there any quirky parts of your writing process that helped you write your story?

Well my troubleshooting is kind of quirky.  I go through a “texting” type of conversation with my characters.  I will go through every aspect with them, in this case Raffael, and together we figure out how the story is going to progress. A lot of times, this takes longer than writing the story.

5. Was there anything surprising that came up in the story - something you maybe weren’t expecting?

My initial idea was to have a large hobgoblin as the leader, but during troubleshooting it worked out that it was a better story to have a human leading them.  Also, the part where Heroff died was unexpected.  That sort of popped in there as I wrote the piece.

6. What was the revision process like for this story?

I didn’t do any major revisions after it was initially written.  It was all finding misspellings, grammar errors and punctuation issues. I did have to cut a small bit to keep within the word count, but that was primarily descriptive and didn’t affect the story.

7. Is there any aspect of your writing in the story you could identify as something you’d like to change, or perhaps improve upon?

I struggle with getting the senses involved.  I have to consciously put those descriptions in and wish I could get better at it.  The same is true with showing instead of telling.  I think I’ve improved on it, but I would like to get even better.

8. What aspect of your F2K learning feels the most significant to your success with this story?

I think the interaction with other writers.  All through this course my classmates have given me outstanding feedback and encouragement.  They let me know what worked, what didn’t and because of them, I was able to create this story.

9. What reaction from the story’s readers has most surprised you, or disappointed you?

Well, I came into this class with the purpose to develop Raffael further.  The reactions I have received with this story and the lessons before it were beyond what I could have imagined.  It seemed that Raffael wasn’t just developed, but also was very well received by those who read about him.  It made me excited to know that he was an interesting and memorable character.

10. What, as a writer, scares you the most?

What scares me is the prospect of running out of stories to write.  I had just begun writing not so long ago and have grown to love it.  I would hate to not be able to write.

11. What is the best writing advice you’ve ever received?

The best advice I have received came from Von last F2K.  She told me it doesn’t matter what I write, as long as I keep doing it.

12. Do you have any plans for this story beyond publication in the F2Kzine?

No.  This story was strictly for F2K.  But Raffael is a major character in the novel I am working on, and he will be the main character for the novel I am planning next.

13. What direction is your writing taking now?

I am currently working on a full size novel as well as working on a series of short stories and flash fiction pieces.

BIO:


TJ Marshall is a father of two adorable girls, a career soldier and a writer of fiction.  TJ just entered the world of writing in January 2012 when he enrolled in the F2K creative writing course.  Since completing the course, he has gone on to join Writer's Villiage University and participated in this year’s National Novel Writer’s Month for the first time and won.  He is currently working on his first novel, a fantasy adventure titled The Finder’s Tome. It is scheduled for release in late spring, 2013 as an e-book. In his spare time, TJ enjoys creating custom designed dream catchers and spending time with his girls.

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